Has This Been Done Before?

jordanisonfire · 10-07-2007, 03:45 PM

This is a problem I'm facing. Basically, I'm writing a Fantasy Horror that is untitled at the moment (I'll post it when I figure out a title). It follows a modern Native American hunter of the occult who is possessed by an evil spirit that is urging him to create mass carnage to save his Grandfather who was kidnapped by a vampire (he becomes an occult hunter after the incident). The evil spirit forms when the vampire kidnaps his Grandfather and he chases after him. The evil spirit manages to make him claw the vampire's face (thus resulting in the vampire losing an eye), but then Tommy (the possessed Native American), in fear, attempts to fight back the spirit's control over his body. In his writhes of the mental struggle with the evil spirit, the vampire escapes with his Grandfather. Now, has this been done before? I have a bad sense that it has.

Shaun · 10-07-2007, 03:51 PM

I don't think it's been done quite like that. The only thing you do need to be careful of is to make sure that the story doesn't follow the same sort of plot line that a lot of other novels involving vampires and their hunters do.
I do want to know what you mean by modern Native American hunter. Do you mean a Native American from today? If so, then the phrasing makes sense, but if you're talking about the 1800's or even earlier then that's not a modern Native American.

jordanisonfire · 10-07-2007, 05:11 PM

I mean a Native American from today. He's a descendant of the Cherokees, I've decided.

Andy · 10-07-2007, 05:35 PM

I can't say I've ever seen something like that before, but I don't read horror that much. Only question is: why is the evil spirit evil? It hurt his grandfather's kidnapper - that doesn't sound so bad.

jordanisonfire · 10-07-2007, 05:51 PM

The spirit is evil because, basically, it likes to kill things (it doesn't matter what it is). Unfortunately for it, it can only manifest in the body of a living thing and, seeing as humans are the most intelligent race on Earth, it decides to go to them. But, with that, comes a price: humans have willpower and they can fight it's control back with their own minds. So, it waits on the edge of the humans mind and whispers to it about blood and death and tries to coax the human into wanting to kill something. There is a reason why it does this, which will be found out in the book. I think I've revealed too much already.

~~phobophile~~ · 10-07-2008, 10:36 AM

good prevailing over evil. i think its been done a few times before. ha. lets change it up people. write some stuff with no demons or witchdoctors or warlocks or evil spirits. how much more cliche' can it get?

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Shaun Dead Person Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Gainesville, FL Posts: 5,597 Points: 11.33 Times Thanked: 136	I don't think it's been done quite like that. The only thing you do need to be careful of is to make sure that the story doesn't follow the same sort of plot line that a lot of other novels involving vampires and their hunters do. I do want to know what you mean by modern Native American hunter. Do you mean a Native American from today? If so, then the phrasing makes sense, but if you're talking about the 1800's or even earlier then that's not a modern Native American. __________________ The Viking Amoeba Army is here! Run for your lives! Tumblr! Read my published fiction and non-fiction! And check out The World in the Satin Bag novel podcast. Help me become rich and donate! My Random Stuff: --The World in the Satin Bag: My science fiction, fantasy, and writing blog! --Check out Cheese & Crackers Original and Cheese & Crackers Superheroes --The Skiffy and Fanty Show --Duke and Zink Do America (Political Podcast) YWO Stuff: --Buy Survival By Storytelling Magazine (Issue One is available!) Support fellow YWO writers! --And don't forget to buy something from YWO's Zazzle Store! --Follow YWO on Twitter. Spoiler: This is a call to arms, gather soldiers, Time to go to war. This is a battle song, brothers and sisters, Time to go to war.

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Andy Administrator Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: At home Posts: 2,556 Points: 50 Times Thanked: 92	I can't say I've ever seen something like that before, but I don't read horror that much. Only question is: why is the evil spirit evil? It hurt his grandfather's kidnapper - that doesn't sound so bad. __________________

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jordanisonfire Master of English Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: England Posts: 5,130 Points: 30 Times Thanked: 95	This is a problem I'm facing. Basically, I'm writing a Fantasy Horror that is untitled at the moment (I'll post it when I figure out a title). It follows a modern Native American hunter of the occult who is possessed by an evil spirit that is urging him to create mass carnage to save his Grandfather who was kidnapped by a vampire (he becomes an occult hunter after the incident). The evil spirit forms when the vampire kidnaps his Grandfather and he chases after him. The evil spirit manages to make him claw the vampire's face (thus resulting in the vampire losing an eye), but then Tommy (the possessed Native American), in fear, attempts to fight back the spirit's control over his body. In his writhes of the mental struggle with the evil spirit, the vampire escapes with his Grandfather. Now, has this been done before? I have a bad sense that it has.

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jordanisonfire Master of English Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: England Posts: 5,130 Points: 30 Times Thanked: 95	I mean a Native American from today. He's a descendant of the Cherokees, I've decided.

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jordanisonfire Master of English Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: England Posts: 5,130 Points: 30 Times Thanked: 95	The spirit is evil because, basically, it likes to kill things (it doesn't matter what it is). Unfortunately for it, it can only manifest in the body of a living thing and, seeing as humans are the most intelligent race on Earth, it decides to go to them. But, with that, comes a price: humans have willpower and they can fight it's control back with their own minds. So, it waits on the edge of the humans mind and whispers to it about blood and death and tries to coax the human into wanting to kill something. There is a reason why it does this, which will be found out in the book. I think I've revealed too much already.

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~~phobophile~~ Banned Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: Montana Posts: 53 Points: 25.3 Times Thanked: 1	good prevailing over evil. i think its been done a few times before. ha. lets change it up people. write some stuff with no demons or witchdoctors or warlocks or evil spirits. how much more cliche' can it get?