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Old 06-01-2011, 08:30 PM View Post #1 (Link) Besoin d'une critique? Oui, oui.
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My French is rusty - hmph.

Anyway, if you need a purpley shnurpley critique, then just post here. Post the title of your submission, in addition to the link.

I can do short stories, poems, and/or novel chapters.

I'll try to get to them as soon as possible.

P.S. If I already gave away some crit tickets already but still didn't get to the submissions yet, then please, do post here to remind me, again, in addition to the link.

Note: I finish school on June 23rd, and I iz free all summer... I think...

kthnxttyllyksrsly.

MAJOREDIT: No more school, folks. Got some free time for you YWO members seeking critiques. :3

So, post away!
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Old 06-01-2011, 09:00 PM View Post #2 (Link)
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rossseeee is fabulous true story.
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Old 06-02-2011, 09:39 PM View Post #3 (Link)
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Don't crit this crap after all.
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Old 06-03-2011, 08:02 AM View Post #4 (Link)
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Originally Posted by Peppermental View Post
Message me for critiques as well, though I only do poetry and/or experimental pieces.
Hi-jacker much
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Old 06-03-2011, 04:44 PM View Post #5 (Link)
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We're both part of the team sparkle motion. butttttt fiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiine I'll make my own thread.
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Old 06-04-2011, 12:24 PM View Post #6 (Link) This post is a reply - don't critique it
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Originally Posted by Peppermental View Post
We're both part of the team sparkle motion. butttttt fiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiine I'll make my own thread.
I'm part of the team sparkle motion? Ohboyohboyohboyohboyyyyyyy. Wooooooot

/spam.

EDIT: love you Caleb. And love your sparklenessness which... you... sprinkled... all over mah thread.

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Caleb/Rose/whoever is interested, I'd be really grateful if you could take a quick glance at this:
http://www.youngwritersonline.net/showthread.php?t=6939
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Please crit Tsunami (tanka). I want it finalized in three days and I'm lacking.
thank you sweetheart!
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Old 06-27-2011, 05:47 PM View Post #9 (Link) This post is a reply - don't critique it
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I started critiquing it actually. It's saved somewhere in my documents. I'll go dig it out and continue critiquing it. Though, I can't promise that the crit will be done tonight.
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Originally Posted by Rose View Post
I started critiquing it actually. It's saved somewhere in my documents. I'll go dig it out and continue critiquing it. Though, I can't promise that the crit will be done tonight.
Thank you! Thank you! Thank you!
Don't worry if you don't get it done tonight.
Thanks.
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