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There are so many things for me to see
Near the ocean, near the sea. The south American forests The Mexican heritage sites, the Masai mara tribe and the clean roads of Spain are easy to ride The Alaskan pines , the stunning Himalayan hue and all the local people to interview. The serene Odisha the valley of flowers And all the scenic places on the world Which have a panoramic view! |
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I can feel your urge to see the world in it's glory.
And it made me want to see those places you mentioned. Can you please add more description? |
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I think if you would add more in describing all the p;aces and things you want to see would add greatly
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It is clear you are wanting to travel and visit places. But somehow the connect between lines seem lost. There does not seem a flow that could make a reader feel the connect. And for each place you could add a bit more of description, that would definitely make a difference.
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Yes yes YES!! Felt that, wanna travel too, esp. to a sea/ocean again and central or south american forests, pls just lemme try ayahuasca in the amazon rainforest then have a pleasant spiritual experience/make contact with the spirit world
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