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Old 10-29-2016, 07:33 PM View Post #1 (Link) Yours
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I was unexpecting, I was fifteen
I had no idea what feelings were
I had no idea what I was getting into
I didn't know what to do

You made me a flower, you made me a princess
You made me delicate and beautiful
You made me feel special, wanted
You made me feel....yours

I'm sixteen now and you're still here
You work your magic on me everyday
You make me feel alive, not dead
Happy, not sad
Worth everything, not worthless
with you by my side, I can do anything

You made me a flower, you made me a princess
You made me delicate and beautiful
You made me feel special, wanted
You made me feel....yours

Two years later, I'm in your arms
Thinking about what we've been through
I can't live without you
You mean everything to me
You're...mine

You made me a flower, you made me a princess
You made me delicate and beautiful
You made me feel special, wanted
You made me feel....yours

You made me a flower, you made me a princess
You made me delicate and beautiful
You made me feel special, wanted
You made me feel....yours

Yes, you made me feel....yours
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Old 11-09-2016, 02:13 AM View Post #2 (Link)
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These are interesting lyrics that have been written. Despite the shortness of it all, I feel like there's nothing wrong with that. It may be that the feelings that are being sent don't need a lot of writing, and that it is easily received by whoever reads it. I like how in the beginning the lyrics were trying to send emotions of aching and longing for the person, and then it progresses into the speaker achieving love and expressing thankfulness. If only I were able to hear these lyrics in the way you thought them through in your head. I'm sure it would have sounded beautiful with music. Please do create more, this is good. I am intrigued.
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