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Old 04-15-2016, 11:28 AM View Post #11 (Link)
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Originally Posted by Fawole Phoebe View Post
It's been long since I've posted anything other than critiques. I'm not sure about these lyrics but lease critique nicely.

Verse 1:
People come, people go
See me run as I flow What do you mean by flowing?
And a a a and Is the and a repeated a sound or just drawn out?

You can see that I'm me and
I really like the way I am oh! Oh Is the Oh drawn out

I believe I can sing
And I can do anything
If I just put my heart and God to it I'm glad you feel that you can share about God in your music! That's great
Yeah! Yeah!
I can do anything, anything

Verse 2:
The sky is very bright
And I can do what is right These two lines don't quite relate as well
When I pray to my God
I believe he is my guard What does guard rhyme with

I believe I can sing
And I can do anything
If I just put my heart and God to it
I can do anything, anything

I can
I can move mountains and turn the sea
I can
I can do anything when I believe
I can
Even when the devil puts me down
I can do anything and not just frown

A long time ago
I hid my face
But with nothing much ado
I knew my place
I felt I had this great talent that should fill the space
What I just did was to join the pace
You can
You can do anything even when you face difficulties
Things might happen to you with a lot of probabilities
But what you can do is to pray like Moses
And before you know it you will surely find Justice.

I believe I can sing
And I can do anything
If I just put my heart and God to it
Yeah! Yeah!
I can do anything, anything.
This is an amazing song!
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Old 05-29-2016, 05:26 PM View Post #12 (Link)
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Truly such a positive song.I can imagine quite a catchy chorus if you composed a tune to the lyric.
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