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Old 12-21-2013, 09:41 AM View Post #11 (Link)
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I step outside, my heart filling up with the joy of leaving the dreadful hell I had called home for ten long years.

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Old 12-22-2013, 03:44 AM View Post #12 (Link)
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Originally Posted by Dabs View Post
An intro sentence is one sentence guys, just fyi, but as long as the OP is chill with it, whatevs.
My bad.


'I vant to suck yer blood,' Gary says to the man in white who removes the needle from his strapped arm.


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Old 12-23-2013, 05:39 AM View Post #13 (Link)
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Wow you picked a genuine nightmare for this one. lol

I stacked all the rejection letters into a neat pile on my desk, carried them out to my back yard, and doused them in light fluid.

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Old 12-24-2013, 03:07 PM View Post #14 (Link)
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Moltov's robotic eye glowed red, focused on the man exiting the supermarket and brought up the man's personal information, as an evil smile formed on Moltov's surly face - This was going to be another easy kill...

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Old 12-24-2013, 04:39 PM View Post #15 (Link)
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When I pulled them apart, their suit sleeves ripped and their cuff links flew across the room and hit a reporter in the eye--she was blind for about two hours after that.

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Old 12-26-2013, 11:23 AM View Post #16 (Link)
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Warning: MA

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She strokes me and I want this, her hand finding my cloud number 9, her tongue, swimmimg in my mouth and pulling me to ectasy.


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Old 12-26-2013, 06:41 PM View Post #17 (Link)
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Originally Posted by M4R13 View Post
Warning: MA

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She strokes me and I want this, her hand finding my cloud number 9, her tongue, swimmimg in my mouth and pulling me to ectasy.
Wow I was thinking of something much more satirical when I wrote the theme. lol
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When they'd mentioned an apple to him, he'd thought they meant a poison apple, not an Adam's apple.

(I cheated by using a semicolon, but whatever)

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Old 12-27-2013, 09:41 AM View Post #19 (Link)
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Wow I was thinking of something much more satirical when I wrote the theme. lol
*chuckles* oops. It's nice that I can still surprise people, myself included.


"Holy shit!" The spectator cries out as he sees the lion suddenly turn around and grab onto the lion tamers arm with a ferocity that called for blood.

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Shut up, will you? You're scaring the other passengers, the flight attendant thinks while she calms the petrified passenger; the flight trembling violently in the onslaught of the turbulent winds outside.

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