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Old 11-10-2007, 08:02 PM View Post #1 (Link) Emotional Poetry
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WHAT DO WE BEGIN WITH?

Seeing as a large percentage of us are teenagers, we tend to like to write about our emotions. Weíre all on hormonal highs, who doesnít get upset now and then and wants to put it into word? But rather than be like everyone else in the world and write in a journal, we want to write a poem so we can share it with are friends, because misery likes company, right? So we start writingÖ

Iím drowning in my tears,
Because I feel so alone.
I see so many other happy people.
Why am I alone?
Iím scared to talk to anyone.
What will they think?
They will think I am alone.


Now, mind I wrote this as a bit of a hyperbole, to exaggerate it. I also just wrote it for this article, so it is really lacking true emotion behind it, but hopefully I can make you think there is emotion behind it, in the way I fix it up.

SO WHAT IS WRONG?

Donít think Iím saying everything like looks like the above is horrible Iím just showing you how you can move one step up. The two things I would like to pick on for emotional poetry are the poetís focus, and word choice. (And maybe Iíll scatter some other things in for the heck of it and not realize it.)

There is, honestly, so much to consider when writing a poem, but I can only touch on so much here. Iím ignoring style, structure, rhyming, and rhythm. Forget it exists, for now. Letís stick to the points I want to work with.

What do I mean when I say the poetís focus? Iím talking about who we are thinking of when we are writing the poem. Me, of course! I bet you are thinking that, arenít you? And itís true, when you are writing an emotional poem about something you experienced and want to express, you are going to become a very selfish writing. If you donít plan on turning this emotional conundrum into good-to-read poetry, then forget Iím even talking to you. But, if you want to right real poetry that people are going to enjoy, you are going to want to forget yourself all together and think of the reader while writing.

Donít tell us how you feel, NO, donít even show us how you feel. Make us feel it. Emotional poetry often times turn into, to steal Snoinkís word, a shopping list. You list the things that happened, followed by a few lines of boo-hooís, and call it a day. This isnít good enough. Put us in your seat, and yes do tell us why we are feeling this way, but make sure we feel it. You want to make us cry/scream/laugh/freak out, what ever you are feeling you want the reader to feel. This is just as close to Ďshow, donít tellí as poetry will ever get, because telling is the most boring thing in the world. Showing is one step up, and from there is feeling.

For more on this or related topics:
Navel Gazing by Snoink.
Making Your Reader Feel by Me
[Both lead to The Young Writers Society]

On to the other idea, word choice. Since words are what make up a poem, we should use good words, right? Why use things like ugly, crying, and pain, when you can say deformed, weeping, and torture? Exactly. For every word out there, there is one better than it. (In most cases.) Really all Iím saying is, when writing the poem, donít choose flimsy words that are thrown around like anything. Pain is such a general term, but is it torture, or ache? Both torture and ache have a connotation with them, they make you think of things besides just pain, and that is what makes them good. Pain, on the other hand, is a plan-and-simple word. Strive for the better words, the words that express how you feel/want your reader to feel in a more vivid way.

AN ENDING

I like closure. So to close, Iím going to quote some people. Also, I would like to make a note: I was bad, I only covered what I will call negative poetry. I didnít talk about happy poetry, sorry folks. Iím sure the same can be said for that, too, though.

"Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion; it is not the expression of personality, but an escape from personality. But, of course, only those who have personality and emotions know what it means to want to escape from these things." - T.S. Eliot

"Poetry should please by a fine excess and not by singularity. It should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts, and appear almost as a remembrance." - John Keats
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Old 11-11-2007, 12:05 AM View Post #2 (Link)
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This was really helpful! Specially because my emotional poems are often like the first example you used Maybe I'll reread this and try a new emotional poem
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But you know, it's not easy getting words that can be of good replacement to the other
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I agree, was looking for this information! 192.168.1.1
  
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I really love the emotional poetry, it seems to me that there is not enough sensuality in these rows
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having read and written a lot of emotional poetry, this is veryyy helpful!
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Hi. How are you all?
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