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Join Date: Jul 2011
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This is my first time writing in first POV short story. I hope you would enjoy it,
The following questions that might help me improve my skills: 1. Does the content of the story confuses you? 2. Does my word of choice needs more improvement? 3. What part of the sentence you do like the best? why? Thanks Spoiler:
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I like the way you tell the story and how enchanting it all seems. The only thing would be some word choices and some grammatical errors to revise. For example, "Dull, blacken(((I would use dark, or shaded maybe))) eyes revealed
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View Post #3 (Link) Engaging |
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Join Date: Aug 2016
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Firstly I'd like to say that you have made good use of every sentence in my opinion which is so important in a short story. You have an interesting piece of writing here which can be hard to achieve in such few words.
The main issue for me is the grammar mistakes such as, 'has been paid of' which I think should read, 'would have paid off'. The tense sometimes seems a bit inconsistent and I think you should try to use mostly the perfect tense in this piece. My main suggestion to you would be to have somebody proof read your work as there are a lot of minor mistakes and once those are fixed your work would read much more professionally. I think you have talent as a writer but need to hone your English Language skills. I hope this was helpful and I'd love to read what happens in the rest of the story. |
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Join Date: Apr 2017
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I a freelancer writer, I write articles for a number of websites. I have start experiments with my writing. I try different-different writing style to improve my writing skill.
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