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Old 09-05-2017, 07:01 AM View Post #4 (Link) Critique
HawaiianParadise (Offline)
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This is a really great poem with an interesting idea--salt being the seasoning of life. I know I never could have thought of that in a million years. haha I can't find any grammatical errors, but there was one thing that confused me.

What's a world twisting knife?

Also, this sentence sounded strange: Since then I've been in fate's debt. I don't know what--if anything--is wrong, but then again I'm pretty bad at critiquing.

All in all, excellent poem--much better than I could write! Good luck!
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