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Old 12-19-2017, 06:10 PM View Post #5 (Link)
llinville (Offline)
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I love the dramatic start. You begin by throwing us right into the action. There are clues telling where in the world this takes place, but maybe there is a way you could give more specific information about that by adding more cultural and setting details. I see that it could be somewhere in the Middle East or Africa, but those are guesses.