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Old 05-31-2017, 07:54 PM View Post #2 (Link)
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This is a great prologue. I love your writing style. I liked how the man was kind of mysteries. The ending came too fast in my opinion. Also, I found the paragraphs kind of repetitive in themselves. Transitions, would help the story run smoothly so that we wont be confused.

This was a great story. I can't wait to see what happens next.
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