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Old 08-11-2015, 11:35 PM View Post #5 (Link)
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No offense but it gave me a headache. It said the same thing over and over again. It had a nice ring to it but it was disorganized and had the same lyrics in it. Try to label what is what, for example, chorus. Also, the song would probably seem like it has less of the same thing if you put more, different lyrics in the song. You have talent, you just need to shape it.
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