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Old 06-19-2015, 05:30 PM View Post #3 (Link)
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Originally Posted by lilyandherviolin View Post
Thought I'd get a jumpstart, gettin' out of town now.
So long on the road, and still it hasn't come down.
Thought I'd get a jumpstart, gettin' out of small town.
I haven't seen the day, but I'm sure I'm on my countdown.

Thought I'd get a jumpstart, gettin' out of town now.
I've been living in the dark, I've been running from my shadow.
Thought I'd get a jumpstart, gettin' out of small town.
I'm too deep in the past, I'm over my head now.

Tiny light, in the dark.
Guide my way, guide my heart.
Tiny light, in the dark.
Guide me home, guide my heart.

Thought I'd get a jumpstart, gettin' out of town now.
So long on the road, and still it hasn't come down.
Thought I'd get a jumpstart, gettin' out of small town.
I haven't seen the day, but I'm sure I'm on my countdown.
This is good! Especially since you're only 13! I'm a songwriter too, so yay for songwriters!

However, I agree with the above critiquer. I think you should add a bridge, maybe a tag, or pre-chorus. Just make it a little longer. throw a splash of variety in there! But, overall, it's good! Keep it up!
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