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Old 08-17-2009, 11:56 PM View Post #3 (Link) This post is a reply - don't critique it
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Thanks very much for the crit, I shall give it a rewrite tomorrow morning anytime you'd like the crit returned just ask and I shall do my best!
As I said its a little bit old so I just posted it without checking out the grammar, which was probably a bad idea. And, just to explain, the character, plot, etc is a bit short on the ground because I originally wrote it as a birthday piece for a friend and it depicted a bit of our history... but I got cold feet about giving it to her! I'm now thinking I could draw it out into something more substantial though and actually give these characters a history on the page too

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