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Old 01-24-2018, 06:37 AM View Post #6 (Link)
anuv127 (Offline)
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It is clear you are wanting to travel and visit places. But somehow the connect between lines seem lost. There does not seem a flow that could make a reader feel the connect. And for each place you could add a bit more of description, that would definitely make a difference.
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