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Old 11-21-2017, 06:28 PM View Post #3 (Link) My critique
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I like it.

I love how you keep the metaphors hidden in plain sight, all while developing the scene, mood, and characters all at the same time. It's a brilliant short story, one that I wouldn't mind reading more of. Keep up the good work
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