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Old 11-20-2017, 03:07 PM View Post #2 (Link) Sad and Melodic in a Good Way
lawdawg25 (Offline)
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The stories tone is well crafted and dark. It is attractive and seductive in nature and gives the reader a sense of someone on the outside looking in without the ability to intervene. All that said, it needs something vital, it needs a beating heart. The tale gives me no reason to care about the protagonist and causes disdain for her rather than a sense of connection.

final review: Good story to be taken at face value
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