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Old 08-20-2017, 06:28 AM View Post #3 (Link) This post is a reply - don't critique it
Ishaan (Offline)
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Originally Posted by SerialLove View Post
Ok, so for the most part, this was a pretty boring piece. I really think you should add a little more imagery, it's nice to actually know what you're talking about, but it's a little less nice when all we're reading is a list. There's nothing here for us [your readers] to really hold onto. For instance, what does the South American forest actually look like? Or the valley of flowers? What flowers are there, what are their colors? Give your readers more imagery. Other then that, good luck and continue writing. If you have any questions feel free to ask.
Sure,I will try to my best to improve my poems.
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