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Old 06-02-2017, 01:29 PM View Post #3 (Link) My critique
Rebekah (Offline)
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I liked the script that you have written. I think it's a good idea to write about it as that is a possible situation. However, I agree with ac_writer that it is solved to quickly with Valerie and dad is solved to quickly. I also think that the ending is a bit rushed as it kind of just finishes and Valerie now gets on with her dad and Meg just leaves. Although, that is the only thing that I think needs editing.

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