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Old 04-13-2017, 09:21 AM View Post #5 (Link) My reveiw
Rebekah (Offline)
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Hi Charlotte S

I loved reading I am a soldier. The vocabulary and phrases you used fitted into the piece very well and allowed me to picture what you were writing about. The only thing I would say, is that in some parts you need to check your tense. You must decide whether you are re-telling the story or whether it is happening right now, then stick to that throughout.
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